See my last comment for my main objection.
My secondary objection is the lack of an em tag around the last sentence.
Glad I could blow your mind.
Oh @stuffisthings, don't get it twisted. There is a difference between using the actual essay space for plugging your stuff and using the bio section, or linking out to your own website and onto kickstarter.
There is also a difference between writing a personal essay to share an experience and doing an interview to talk about a new project. This was framed as one, but, after a surprise left-turn last paragraph, turned into another.
Don't paint me as anti-writer; I am a working writer and editor. I simply don't like being sold one thing and getting another. There are several ways that Albert's story could have been told AND drum up support for her kickstarter without it being advertorial.
Obviously, the editors thought this was fine to run. I simply wanted to point out that this reader was not into this kind of thing, no matter how cool the project.
@stuffisthings @Shazziz Yes, an ad is an ad, and is marked as such on this site. Clicking on links in such a thing makes money for the hairpin which helps it run. I am all for that.
The bio at the end of an article is the place to talk about projects, no matter how time-crunched. I don't come to the hairpin for advertorial, and ending the essay in that way totally frames it as such.
Edited to add:
And: "The intention of this essay was to share my personal experience in a world that can be easily misunderstood unless you've experienced it- much like producing an Internet Series."
I'm not saying that your essay was not good, just that it was in service of selling your program and I don't like that.
Would have like this a lot more without the kickstarter link at the end.
@ohnoohno Double comment, ahoy.
I've been trying to comment on this for two days to say how much I loved this piece. It feels like a kiss blown to all us grievers out here.
I relate too well to "somewhere between falling in love and trying to function." I am still in love with that same person, but death is hovering again and I am feeling many of those relentless feelings flooding back.
@mystique Yes. Yes. Yes. The best way to stay sane, draw plants and remember that each day is distinct. I tend to write about the mundane, but occasionally I'll get up to some wordsmithing.
@katiemcgillicuddy Stereo Total & Flin Flon, 2000something.
What do you do if your answers are a curious mix of Bs & Cs?